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Regrets

Regrets  : 2544 words, Gen.  Curufin, in the Halls of Mandos, does his homework.

Five pages of regrets, written in a language no-one knows. I’ll parcel them up and give them to the Maiar of Mandos. Who knows? Perhaps I will have bought a little of my father’s time, which like his Silmarils is stolen from him and held by others who have no right to claim it.

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r_blackcat
14th Nov, 2017 15:34 (UTC)
Oh, I'm only 2 month late - good.
I can't say that I like to read about Curufin - if the character is captured well (as yours) it's like having a conversation with a very unpleasant person :D But the idea of Khuzdul have made me giggle - that's exactly what Curufin would do, yeah!
And I must tell, I didn't notice nothing "unelvish" in your language there. I didn't check it specifically, just notice it days after I've read it. Well, Curufin wasn't drinkikg coffee; but maybe the matter is that he's so individual, so unice, that his personality outweight any "elvishness\unelvishness".
bunn
14th Nov, 2017 18:23 (UTC)
Curufin is certainly distinctive -- though I ended up liking him more after writing this, oddly, than I did before.

There is no dialogue in 'Regrets', so I wonder if that is what makes the difference in the language feeling 'elvish'? I think my dialogue tends to be more colloquial, and I tend to use contractions, which perhaps read as a little more modern : 'I'll' rather than 'I will'.

I may experiment with avoiding them, and see what that does...
r_blackcat
15th Nov, 2017 13:25 (UTC)
Oh. I'll try to pay atention to dialogues\monologues while reading your fics.
I somehow think "I will"/"I'll" is not what works for me... But maybe some other contractions?
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